Robot Writing - What It Is & How to Avoid It


Many beginner writers fall into the habit of what I like to refer to as “robot writing.” It’s when you basically write your scenes like a grocery list. Ex:

Marcy stood and walked across the room. Then she picked up the candle stick to inspect it. She blinked when she noticed the spot of dried blood. Marcy dropped the candlestick and ran from the room.

I call it robot writing because when I'm reading it I tend to fall into a robotic pattern and start to sound like the robot from the old Lost In Space series. "Danger. Danger. Will Robinson." You may as well put numbers in front of each sentence:

First Marcy stood and walked across the room.
Second she picked up the candlestick to inspect it.
Third she blinked when she noticed the spot of dried blood.
Fourth she dropped the candlestick and ran from the room.

Don’t get me wrong, robot writing is absolutely acceptable in your first draft, no matter your writing experience. Your first priority in a first draft is to get the story out of your head on into your document. But robot writing better not make it past the manuscript’s revision stage. Smooth those transitions and heighten your reader’s experience by offering emotion, smells, and sounds. Ex:

Biting her lip, Marcy stood and crossed the room, her legs weak with anticipation. Her heart pounded as she reached for the candlestick. Had the weapon been here all along? The heft of the stick both surprised her and confirmed her suspicions. It was indeed weighty enough to deliver a blow to the head. Then, her worst fear was confirmed. There on the finial was a spot of dried blood. She could almost smell the copper scent in the air as if the murder had only just happened. A door closed somewhere nearby. The candlestick thudded to the floor as Marcy fled the room.

As you can see, the most recent revision offers a ton more suspense and makes us want to keep reading. I recently listened to an audiobook with a lot of robot writing and I would find myself planning dinner or a scene from my latest WIP, before realizing I missed what was happening in the story.

To avoid losing your reader’s attention, avoid robot writing.

Comments

  1. Interesting. I never thought about it, but it makes sense. Better watch my writing. I don't think I do that. Thanks for the reminder.

    ReplyDelete
  2. i liked your blog so much it is good i want to share some knowlwledge with you i hope you can visit and comment on my website Upcoming Government Exams Upcoming Government Job list of competitive exams for government jobs upcoming competitive exams

    ReplyDelete
  3. your blog is unique, i really liked your blog, I want to share some news with you on world news. latestest news. just take some time and check my website as possible as, thank you Amazon Upcoming Sale July 2020 amazon fab phone sale amazon upcoming sale offers Amazon Upcoming Sale Upcoming Sale July 2020

    ReplyDelete
  4. INSTEAD OF GETTING A LOAN,, I GOT SOMETHING NEW
    Get $5,500 USD every day, for six months!

    See how it works
    Do you know you can hack into any Credit cards machine with a hacked Credit cards??
    Make up your mind before applying, straight deal...

    Order for a blank Credit cards now and get millions within a week!: contact us
    via email address:: {Legitblankcardsonline@gmail.com}

    We have specially programmed Credits Cards that can be use to hack Credit cards Machines
    Nation Wide, the Credits Cards can be used to withdraw at any Credits Cards or swipe Machines, at
    Stores and POS Machines. We sell this cards to all our customers and interested
    buyers worldwide, the Credit Card has a daily withdrawal limit of $5,500 at any Credit cards Machines
    and up to $50,000 spending limit in stores depending on the kind of card
    you order for. Credits Cards Can also be used in any other cyber hack{Services}, we are here for you anytime any day.

    Here is our price lists for the Credits Cards:

    Cards that withdraw $5,500 per day costs $250 USD
    Cards that withdraw $10,000 per day costs $850 USD
    Cards that withdraw $35,000 per day costs $2,200 USD
    Cards that withdraw $50,000 per day costs $5,500 USD
    Cards that withdraw $100,000 per day costs $8,500 USD


    make up your mind before applying, straight deal!!!

    The price include shipping fees and charges, order now: contact us via
    email address:: {Legitblankcardsonline@gmail.com} Or
    Add us on Whatsapp [+13473848100]

    ReplyDelete
  5. I am always searching online for articles that can help me. There is obviously a lot to know about this. I think you made some good points in Features also. Keep working, great job
    고스톱

    ReplyDelete
  6. You there, this is really good post here. Thanks for taking the time to post such valuable information. Quality content is what always gets the visitors coming.
    스포츠토토

    ReplyDelete
  7. Wow! Such an amazing and helpful post this is. I really really love it. It's so good and so awesome. I am just amazed. I hope that you continue to do your work like this in the future also.
    일본야동

    ReplyDelete
  8. Positive site, where did u come up with the information on this posting? I'm pleased I discovered it though, ill be checking back soon to find out what additional posts you include.
    토토사이트

    ReplyDelete
  9. I just visit your website and I found it very informative. Please share more content just like that. I want to read more content so please upload more articles. Thanks in advanced.

    Packaging Host

    Die Cut Stickers

    Static Cling

    Cheap Latest Products

    Property Saga

    Lahore Smart City

    Nova City Islamabad

    Park View City Islamabad

    Al Noor Orchard Lahore

    ReplyDelete
  10. Thanks for sharing this valuable and understanding article with us.
    Here we have provided the anton schneider cuckoo clock Guide that helps you
    in your all needs of anton schneider cuckoo clock &
    solved all your cuckoo clock probelm.

    ReplyDelete
  11. We advise stocking up on product so you can use them as soon as you need to The Mega Clean Detox Drink from Detoxify is a great option to help you pass a mouth swab test. This drink is designed to strip your body of all toxins while replacing lost vitamins and minerals. While drinks like this are most helpful during a urine drug test they can still help avoid detection during an oral saliva test. This drink is an herbal supplement so it is completely safe to use. You can even consume 20 ounces every two hours if you want to make sure everything clears out of your system. By offering two delicious flavors you’ll actually enjoy consuming this. As a bonus when you purchase this product you will receive Detoxify’s PreCleanse Herbal supplements to further kick anything from your system. It’s recommended to use this product 12 - 24 hours before your test for the best results. Of course, during this time you will want to avoid anything that would reintroduce toxins into your body. Foaming When real human urine is poured into the drug test container, it will have a foamy, bubbly consistency. Albumin, which is a protein made by the liver and filtered through the kidneys, is responsible for this frothy texture. High-quality fake urine will also include some albumin to recreate this effect. Temperature Finally, and possibly the most important factor is temperature. Cold fake urine will be an immediate giveaway. Your sample needs to maintain your body's temperature. Real human urine will lie around 90°F to 98°F.

    ReplyDelete
  12. Thanks for sharing this valuable and understanding article with us.
    Finding Best Epson Projector Black Friday and Cyber ​​Monday Sale 2021 Deals -
    Christmas is coming and Epson Projector Black Friday deals are just around the corner.

    ReplyDelete
  13. "The Masters Real Estate" is official sales partner of Lahore Smart City and 1st Smart City which is Capital Smart City . We are one of the most enticing options on the planet of real estate. Our prestigious forum provides the potential solution of all your ambiguities regarding the purchasing of shops, lands, and houses.

    We have engaged our teams in various cities of Pakistan as well as the online world to make our services accessible. The provision of reasonable price real estate properties by our company is attracting the residents and the foreigners. We have intended to provide luxurious construction projects and houses at affordable prices to our nation. One more socity launch soon which is Faisalabad Smart City

    Also Check Location at: Lahore Smart City Location

    For More Visit: The Masters Real Estate

    ReplyDelete
  14. 토토365프로 Because the admin of this web site is working, no doubt very quickly it will be renowned,
    due to its feature contents.


    ReplyDelete
  15. 토토 Greate article. Keep writing such kind of info on your page.
    Im really impressed by it.

    ReplyDelete
  16. 바카라사이트 I think the admin of this site is really working hard for his site, for the reason that here every information is quality based
    information.

    ReplyDelete
  17. 온라인카지노 What's up, I want to subscribe for this blog to obtain most recent updates, therefore where can i do it please
    help.



    ReplyDelete
  18. That is a great tip particularly to those new to the blogosphere.
    Simple but very accurate info? Thank you for sharing this one.
    A must read post!
    Appreciating the hard work you put into your site and detailed information you present.
    Wonderful read!
    토토사이트

    ReplyDelete
  19. This is one of the best website I have seen in a long time thank you so much, thank you for let me share this website to all my friends. 바카라사이트

    ReplyDelete

Post a Comment

Popular posts from this blog

Susan Kaye Quinn, Author of Open Minds, Presents:

I Want More – The Story Behind the Story, I Am Me